afineidea

clearly
from a
distance
it seemed
a fine idea
settled life
coupleofkids
relationship
sincerity
butevery
day
wecarryon
automatic
comms lost
listening
to static
anilook atyou
whileusleepani
see nocourse
rounobstacles
that separate   us
sostrange
we rarely
analyseourlives
perhaps
weshould

 

 

poem © copyright Brian Shirra 2015

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2 comments on “afineidea

  1. othermary says:

    Your spacing of words and line breaks reinforces the message. Well done, you!

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